Moriah Leila

I like it, the plot idea is really cool. Although I am wondering what the significance of the dead dog is. Couldn't you just make the dog a live dog, ...

Hi, underwater! After you said you were weirder than me, I had to check out some of your work! I really like this post. I enjoy the informal tone, you ...

Hey Firefly, welcome to YWS! I love your avatar, very cute. Is Black Saturday in reference to the brushfires that burned across Victoria in February? I thought this was a ...

Hey there! I read the first part and found it very interesting. Since no one has gotten to this part, I am going to give you a thorough review. Hopefully ...

Wow, good job. I felt like you explained the relationship between God and Adam well. I really liked the part about having a doctor appoint an engineer or vice versa. ...

Hey there, great story! I loved the first chapter and thought this chapter was just as intruiging. The one thing I have to point out is that you changed tenses. ...

Hi there! I will be reviewing your work today. Basically, I will do a few nitpicks and then do some overall commentary at the very end. Hopefully you will find ...

Hi, me again! Glad to see that you've been able to post some more. You've done a colorful job of explaining how Trinity became pregnant, but as Lena pointed out, ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS. If you haven't already you should visit the Welcome Mat and tell us a little about yourself. I really enjoyed this story, even though it ...

Hey there, ready for a review? Of course you are. I agree with Meadowlark, I don't think you should explain what your story is about, as it should be able ...

Hi Maddy! I found this story and thought I might give you a review. Typically, I will do small nitpicks and then give you more in-depth suggestions/comments at the end. ...

Hey there, here is that review you requested. Hopefully it helps! She claims she needs the right kind of music to help her cook: jazz and salsa mean wild, spicy ...

Hey there, I will be giving you a nitty gritty review. My corrections will be in red and my comments in bold. First of all, I found it very intriguing. ...

Hey there, yet another great chapter! Your details are vivid, the dialogue flows well, and you keep me interested throughout. My nitpicks are minor. Outside my window, the trees’ bare ...

I thought that the dialogue felt realistic and seemed to flow nicely. My only real complaint was with the ending of the story. First of all, I felt like it ...